Pleiades Star Cluster

Pleiades Star Cluster (Photo credit: aresauburn™)

I pray
The way
Will cut through all dismay, today you
Give to my heart, I pray, the way through

It’s true
I do
Come through
For you
My heart was yours then, it’s true I do care
Despite this pain I come through for you there

And we
Are free
To be
As our souls at birth, and we are free, close
Now to stars wished to be, purely, most

(This is an attempt at the Tyborn form which has a syllable structure of 2/2/2/2/9/9 with the 5th, 6th, 7th and 8th syllables repeating in the last two lines.  It’s hard to do and I’m not sure I’ve done it justice!)

(c) Helen Valentina 2013, All Rights Reserved

About Helen

I'm drawn to blogging as a way to share ideas and consider what makes us who we are. Whether it's in our working life or our creativity, expression is a means to connect.
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10 Responses to Stars

  1. I love when you teach new things!! I loved it….not sure I get the style yet, but I loved what it had to say.

  2. Kira says:

    You came through with flying colors!! It is a form that is harder than it looks. This is wonderful 🙂

    • Thank you – not sure about the last stanza really, it is a difficult form, but it is good to take up a challenge with writing I think. Thanks for our kind words!! 🙂

  3. ksbeth says:

    wow, i think you did wonderfully with this one )

  4. Jamie Dedes says:

    A good job of it. Like! 🙂

  5. Justice has been done wow! This form does look tough

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