Can I whisper you a secret
Do you promise not to tell?
Does it matter if it’s painful
Would the truth do just as well?
I’ve a face that hides my spirit
There’s another lurking there
And sometimes I see her winking
In the space beneath the stairs
I’ve a voice that sings a sorrow
Like a lark pierced by a spear
I’ve a monster underneath my bed
I don’t even think to fear
I’ve a memory I’ve forgotten
I’ve a story yet untold
I don’t care for its conclusion
Or the way it might unfold
Will you keep for me my secret
Since I’ve chosen now to share?
When you’ve almost just forgotten
I’ll remind you that it’s there.
(c) Helen Valentina 2013, All rights Reserved
mindlovemisery’s prompt this week was for us to share anything, so I thought I’d write a strange little quasi nursery rhyme about sharing strangely 🙂 🙂 …. See her prompts and her great writing at http://mindlovemisery.wordpress.com
Wow Helen that 2nd stanza just blew me away I can very much relate, your writing is so elegant and the flow is so good its supernatural
Thanks so much! I love the nursery rhyme form as it is kind of sinister and innocent all at once, which is fun to write. 🙂 Thanks for the inspiration once more with the prompt, my friend! 🙂
Nursery rhyme form? Is that what you use because its wonderful!
This was meant to be a type of mad nursery rhyme. Mostly I just use rhyme in different form/rhythms etc which I wouldn’t think of in that way. This was just a deliberate attempt to be nursery-rhymish. I think I write in rhyme so much because I learned to sing when I was younger and I resonate very much to lyrics in songs. 🙂
Oh wow I didn’t know that I sing like a robot/moon-gazing coyote no wonder I have no flow lol
LOL, I think writing is just personal style, I’m a lyrics junkie though really, and I think I shows in mine. 🙂
I love lyrics too that is pretty much how I choose my music David Usher amazing lyrics hence I love him to bits lol
I’ve got a monster under my bed. If I walk past in bare feet its paw shoots and and tries to scratch my toes. I’ve got two more of them downstairs asleep on the settee as well.
See, the thing is, you should probably be able to charge them rent, not that they’d be likely to pay on time, or at all I suppose…. 🙂 🙂
As always Helen, an excellent read. Love Mindlovemisery’s blog as well.
Thank you Ray and yes, mindlovermiserys writing is awesome! 🙂 🙂
It most certainly is. 🙂
Secrets are dark as grave, secrets will always pinch and prod its master of its existence.
Nice post Helen 🙂
Thank you so much!! 🙂 🙂
Nursery rhyme form? You sell yourself short ma’am.
Thank you so much, you are very kind. I meant the kind of mad, sing-gong quality that nursery rhymes have…some of them can be quite dark and sinister and interesting. 🙂 🙂
Very true 🙂
this has a very elegant movement…I think we all have secrets and wonder who we can share them with.
Thanks so much!! 🙂 🙂
great response! Love the formal elegance and the flow – has a real musicality about it.
Thank you so much!! 🙂 🙂
That second line really hits home for me. Great write!
Thank you!! 🙂 🙂
‘Sinister and innocent all at once’ that’s it exactly! Love this 🙂
Thanks Jill!!! 🙂 🙂