Secret – For Prompt 9 – Free Share

I will whisper hidden secrets in your ear

I will whisper hidden secrets in your ear (Photo credit: HAMED MASOUMI)

Can I whisper you a secret
Do you promise not to tell?
Does it matter if it’s painful
Would the truth do just as well?

I’ve a face that hides my spirit
There’s another lurking there
And sometimes I see her winking
In the space beneath the stairs

I’ve a voice that sings a sorrow
Like a lark pierced by a spear
I’ve a monster underneath my bed
I don’t even think to fear

I’ve a memory I’ve forgotten
I’ve a story yet untold
I don’t care for its conclusion
Or the way it might unfold

Will you keep for me my secret
Since I’ve chosen now to share?
When you’ve almost just forgotten
I’ll remind you that it’s there.

(c) Helen Valentina 2013, All rights Reserved

mindlovemisery’s prompt this week was for us to share anything, so I thought I’d write a strange little quasi nursery rhyme about sharing strangely 🙂 🙂 …. See her prompts and her great writing at

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I'm drawn to blogging as a way to share ideas and consider what makes us who we are. Whether it's in our working life or our creativity, expression is a means to connect.
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25 Responses to Secret – For Prompt 9 – Free Share

  1. Wow Helen that 2nd stanza just blew me away I can very much relate, your writing is so elegant and the flow is so good its supernatural

    • Thanks so much! I love the nursery rhyme form as it is kind of sinister and innocent all at once, which is fun to write. 🙂 Thanks for the inspiration once more with the prompt, my friend! 🙂

  2. Brian Hughes says:

    I’ve got a monster under my bed. If I walk past in bare feet its paw shoots and and tries to scratch my toes. I’ve got two more of them downstairs asleep on the settee as well.

  3. Ray says:

    As always Helen, an excellent read. Love Mindlovemisery’s blog as well.

  4. Juned says:

    Secrets are dark as grave, secrets will always pinch and prod its master of its existence.
    Nice post Helen 🙂

  5. Nursery rhyme form? You sell yourself short ma’am.

  6. gs batty says:

    this has a very elegant movement…I think we all have secrets and wonder who we can share them with.

  7. great response! Love the formal elegance and the flow – has a real musicality about it.

  8. That second line really hits home for me. Great write!

  9. Jill London says:

    ‘Sinister and innocent all at once’ that’s it exactly! Love this 🙂

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