Castle Durnstein (with YPaul) (Photo credit: muppetspanker)
In hallowed halls
These wretched days
When valour calls
Above the haze
The blood you spill
The lives that fall
Will haunt you still
Will sound the call
The hand you play
The friends you kill
Will lead the way
To death, until
All truth is lost
And wise men say
Quick! Pay the cost
Without delay!
A friendly host
Has donned his mask
He’s but a ghost
Has but one task
This devil’s call
Revives him most
Before we fall
We’ll pay the cost
(c) Helen Valentina 2013, All Rights Reserved
helenvalentina 
I’ve absolutely no idea what it means, but I liked it.
LOL…it was just meant to be a kind of creepy vibe rather than a story, with my concentration more on repeating the rhyming pattern cross the stanzas in a way that hopefully seemed to progress/move. š
This poem reads very nicely, well done! It reminds me of Macbeth.
Gwen
Wow, thank you, that is so kind! I loved Macbeth so that comparison is very flattering! š
Sounds creepy like a ghost story.
Cool, thank you, it was meant to be a bit creepy. š
makes me think of an executioner
Oohhh…chilling! Thanks!!! š š
Something a bit different!
Thank you – it was an attempt at a different type of poetic form where the rhyme pattern ‘whirls’ from one stanza to the next…not sure if the poem worked completely or was too much a hostage to the form I was trying but it was fun to try! š
(blinking)…. was a terrific poem as I’m now hiding underneath my desk…… hehehe hugggs
LOL…sorry! Didn’t mean to be that scary…just sort of dark… š š
I agree with Gwen that it does have a Macbeth vibe to it. When I read it felt like a viking tale or even king arthur. Something from a non technological time where culture was rich and glory meant everything.
Thanks somuch – that’s certainly the type of time I was thinking of…somewhere in the back of my mind was the time of tudor England I think…I have a strong sympathy for Anne Boleyn so that kind of dark, medieval, dangerous time was in my head as I wote it. š š
Oh! And I loved the rhyme and flow.
Thank you!!! š