Endings – Five Sentence Fiction

With thanks to Owlish Thoughts for the idea of the five sentence fiction form πŸ™‚

The burden of love freely given but which I cannot return weighs so heavy on me, dragging me down further into my silence. I want to scream at him, to tell the truth, that I cannot love him, and break down the earnest loyalty he daily proves. I want to say ‘the day that changed everything I was not coming to you, but leaving you’. It would take away his guilt which he wears now like a beloved hair shirt and replace it with knowledge of betrayal. But I cannot do this because I ran too fast and between us, instead of my choice, came the accident, and I cannot now speakΒ truth from my coma.

(c) Helen Valentina 2013, All Rights Reserved

About Helen

I'm drawn to blogging as a way to share ideas and consider what makes us who we are. Whether it's in our working life or our creativity, expression is a means to connect.
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11 Responses to Endings – Five Sentence Fiction

  1. intense…. and well written my friend…. πŸ™‚

  2. purple says:

    You do this so well, telling a story with so little, and the ending … I should’ve seen THAT coming! Awesome short short.

  3. So much is said in the compact of those five sentences. Exceptionally written.

  4. This is beautiful. All five sentences are so jam packed, in a fantastic way. Love the idea of the five sentence fiction!

    • Thank you so much…the concept of five sentence fiction was not mine. I saw it on the Owlish Thoughts blog and it seemed a fantastic writing discipline to try to master. Glad you liked the outcome in this instance and thanks for stopping by! πŸ™‚

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