Mystic’s Last Love Song – for Prompt 42 Tired Surrender

image credit:  templeilluminatus.com

image credit: templeilluminatus.com

Upon these streets I have listlessly wandered
Within lost thoughts I have sunken and floundered
In brittle light bathed I’m en-webbed and confounded
Ears harkening to the call

A barefoot adept, arms outstretched on high
In this moment more afraid to live than to die
With such tearless eyes, all the wretched may cry
We stoop before we fall

In gentle paradox is the food that we crave
In righteousness doubtful, in freedom enslaved
Dug so deep in the earth, too interred to be saved
A splinter in the eye of the All

A student afraid of her teacher precise
Hidden cat in the darkness, her heart turned to ice
Finds redemption’s sweet fire, the soul’s sacrifice
No surrender too great or too small

Not to fail, or be prisoners of our perfect device
No surrender too great or too small

(c) Helen Valentina 2014, All Rights Reserved

For mindlovemisery’s prompt at: http://mindlovemisery.wordpress.com/2014/02/09/prompt-42-tired-surrender/

About helenvalentina

Like most people, I have a number of sides to me. The most interesting one probably emerges through my writing, hence this blog. I love to read, and also to write, and so this is a way to share both.
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19 Responses to Mystic’s Last Love Song – for Prompt 42 Tired Surrender

  1. Ooooh Helen very inspired work!!! Masterfully woven

  2. ‘Not….to be prisoners of our own perfect device’ what a fascinating line Helen. I can’t help thinking you are saying we should not be closed to change or suggestion.

  3. Mike says:

    Your metaphysical thoughts and their precise descriptions are commendable here Helen. The structure and rhyme scheme also stands out. Very well done.

  4. douryeh says:

    Brilliant poem! You always bring quality, I’m glad you’re here.

  5. philipparees says:

    ‘We stoop before we fall’ Indeed. Genuflect, or implore? Surrender. This is one of your very best because the unity of alternatives lie not only in the imagery and the conflict, but the held tension. Mavellous Helen!

  6. Skye says:

    I wondered what you would do for this prompt….it is not surprise you captured it perfectly, as always!!! 🙂 xxxx

  7. SSMatthews says:

    Nice work! An impressive read!

  8. Powerful writing. More afraid to live than to die.

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