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Upon these streets I have listlessly wandered
Within lost thoughts I have sunken and floundered
In brittle light bathed I’m en-webbed and confounded
Ears harkening to the call
A barefoot adept, arms outstretched on high
In this moment more afraid to live than to die
With such tearless eyes, all the wretched may cry
We stoop before we fall
In gentle paradox is the food that we crave
In righteousness doubtful, in freedom enslaved
Dug so deep in the earth, too interred to be saved
A splinter in the eye of the All
A student afraid of her teacher precise
Hidden cat in the darkness, her heart turned to ice
Finds redemption’s sweet fire, the soul’s sacrifice
No surrender too great or too small
Not to fail, or be prisoners of our perfect device
No surrender too great or too small
(c) Helen Valentina 2014, All Rights Reserved
For mindlovemisery’s prompt at: http://mindlovemisery.wordpress.com/2014/02/09/prompt-42-tired-surrender/
helenvalentina 
Ooooh Helen very inspired work!!! Masterfully woven
Thank you!! 🙂 🙂
‘Not….to be prisoners of our own perfect device’ what a fascinating line Helen. I can’t help thinking you are saying we should not be closed to change or suggestion.
It certainly could mean that. The poem is about a mystic so it’s also about being open to the numinous and spiritual, but you can read it other ways too that are just as valid. 🙂
Ok thanks Helen.
Your metaphysical thoughts and their precise descriptions are commendable here Helen. The structure and rhyme scheme also stands out. Very well done.
Thanks so much Mike!! 🙂 🙂
Brilliant poem! You always bring quality, I’m glad you’re here.
Thank you so much, that is so very kind of you!! 🙂 🙂
‘We stoop before we fall’ Indeed. Genuflect, or implore? Surrender. This is one of your very best because the unity of alternatives lie not only in the imagery and the conflict, but the held tension. Mavellous Helen!
Wow, thanks Philippa – it means a lot coming from you, particularly given the topic! 🙂 🙂
I wondered what you would do for this prompt….it is not surprise you captured it perfectly, as always!!! 🙂 xxxx
Thanks so much dear Sis!! 🙂 🙂 xxx
Nice work! An impressive read!
Thanks so much! 🙂 🙂
beautiful )
Thank you!! 🙂 🙂
Powerful writing. More afraid to live than to die.
Thanks so much!! 🙂 🙂