Hidden Depths – for Prompt 13 – Photo Inspiration

photo credit: mindlovemisery

photo credit: mindlovemisery

We waited outside
Deathless minutes passing
Far beyond the weave of grieving
We waited

It is very true
there is no knowing
the heart of loss turning, twisting
seeking succour and compassion
in hallowed walls,
these hidden depths

The priest was ashen
Bereft of words, his shoulders slumped
as she emerged with him so much later
to the pitiless afternoon gloom
I wanted to take his hand,
to comfort him also
He, perennially required to soothe,
but beyond solace

His church, his house,
this bleeding sacred heart,
cannot fathom or encompass
such unknowable loss
Her child gone to her
To a mystery
We could not speak

We looked only to these decaying walls
as though in their stillness
they might finally,
finally let her know
what had happened to her girl
and where she rested
If she rested

No angels gathered at the doorway
or sang across the halls
We waited silent
for her resolution,
her cold and lost acceptance,
embraced her weeping,
then took her slowly,
slowly home

(c) Helen Valentina 2013, All Rights Reserved

For mindlovemisery’sΒ Prompt 13, using a photo from her own collection (posted above), so all credit to her for such a haunting photo – of course I’d choose the church of all the pictures (knowing me!) – but the story that seemed to unwind within me as I contemplated it was grim indeed (fiction, I hasten to add). Great inspiration, as you will find with all her wonderful writing at:

About Helen

I'm drawn to blogging as a way to share ideas and consider what makes us who we are. Whether it's in our working life or our creativity, expression is a means to connect.
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12 Responses to Hidden Depths – for Prompt 13 – Photo Inspiration

  1. howanxious says:

    that is so full of pain.. a remarkable job! πŸ™‚

  2. Helen thank you for your kind words! You are sweet. And thank you for this extraordinary poem wow I agree with howanxious the pain/suffering is palpable. That 4th stanza my god it breaks my heart. Amazing job =)

  3. Elia Bintang says:

    I think this is the best poem I’ve read today. I always love sad poems, but this is more than just sad. And you wrote it with so much depth. Great stuff. πŸ™‚

  4. Beautiful job Helen. So evocative… the loss, grief and anguish.

  5. gs batty says:

    this captures the grief of loss so well. we are all left in a strange place wondering why.
    Very good…mu kudos to you

  6. lolamouse says:

    I’m glad you added that this was fiction. As I read, the words were so powerful and real, I thought the story might be a true one.

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