Broken Heart (Photo credit: Gabriela Camerotti)
Now here we are
Lost in a fantasy
You had a heart
Long before mine was born
Now here we are
Waiting hopelessly
When all our time has gone
Now here we stand
Nothing for us to do
I had a plan
Hoping to conquer you
Now here we are
Lost in entropy
As all our time is through
Hoping that by
Talking to you
Hoping that I
Could bring pain to you
Now here we are
Lost in a fantasy
You had a heart
You showed for all to see
Now here I am
Knowing something new
I broke my own heart too.
(c) Helen Valentina 2013, All Rights Reserved
helenvalentina 
wow Helen…. intensely written…. but brilliant my friend…. great job! 😉
Thank you so much, it’s a re-working of a song lyric I wrote back when I was sixteen…the general poem always stayed with me and with slight tweaking works now. 🙂
I’m kind of curious how the music goes. *sigh* More hearts lost and broken. I liked it! lol.
Thank you! Unfortunately i can’t actually read or write music, so there is a melody for this but I can’t write it down for you. 😦
This is a lovely Poem!
A few people have published some poems they wrote when they younger today and like yours they have all been spectacular, I am almost mad that I didn’t write my poems down back then.
This reminds me of the time I made some pretty bad mistakes and ended up breaking the heart of someone I truly loved and I broke my own in the process.
Love it. =]
Thank you so much!! 🙂 I don’t have much from writing when I was young but for some reason I always remembered this, possibly because it stayed with the melody in my head.
when they were younger***
it is curious
how our songs
keep circling, spiraling
over years
Very true, they remain somewhat like lost but not forgotten friends. 🙂
Beautiful. 🙂
Thank you so much!! 🙂
Those closing lines just break my heart, I have broken my heart many times
Thank you so much…when I wrote it I was so young it wasn’t from experience, though at the time I did have a huge crush on a boy at school who I consequently couldn’t talk to, LOL, so I just watched from afar. He was probably my unknowing muse. All these years later I do not believe I ever saw a more beautiful creature than that boy…. sigh… 🙂
Those childhood crushes are the best and often the most painful parts of childhood! Awww that is so sweet. I remember my cousin had a crush when she was a kid named Daniel. She had to endure a lot of very painful operations to remove a nevus and a lot of kids were cruel to her but he was always kind to her. When she had to move away from him it broke my heart and I wasn’t even in the relationship! Its just that even though she was so small she loved him so much, it was so beautiful. As an adult she still thinks of him fondly. I am secretly a romantic lol
LOL, me too!! 🙂
loved this…
Thank you so much, really appreciated! 🙂
Beautiful. It’s very expressive!
Thank you so much!! 🙂 🙂
Helen, your poem is vividly emotional and romantic. Wonderfully well written, thank you for sharing. Youthful emotions are amazing in their ability to experience with no blinders on (both pain and joy)!
Thanks so much, that is so very kind of you. I know I wrote a lot back in those days but that’s pretty much the only one I really remember. I read an interesting book once called ‘The Soul’s Code’ which said that the adult exists in the child, like an oak exists in an acorn, so to speak, and youthful ambitions, works etc show the true soul. It was an interesting idea, based on the work of Plato if I recall correctly. 🙂
The Soul’s Code, excellent advice and probably truer than most realize. I’m glad you remembered this one though! I really enjoyed it! 🙂
It was a great book, made a big impression on me when I read it. 🙂
This is awesome!
I totally can see these as lyrics to an awesome song. Good tempo!
Thank you so much, really appreciated. In my head it has a pretty melody, obviously minor key. Wish I knew how to write music properly. I often think the reason so many of my poems are rhymes is because I’m a would-be song writer at heart…. 🙂 I spent quite a few years in my youth learning to sing – opera actually though that’s not my favourite musical form – but I think that singer’s sensibility has stayed with me.
Agreeing with the rest…would make an awesome song!! Love reading what’s in your heart, Helen…it is always a gift.
Thank you so much my dear friend! 🙂